2018年2月3日土曜日

Writing-Sr.3-Feb.3

What do you think?  
Do you think professional athletes earn too much? Why or why not?
=> Speak your answer in 60 minutes.
=> Write five to eight sentences in response.

I don’t think professional athletes earn too much money.
There are only a small number of athletes who become successful in professional sports or competitions.
They must have worked harder than others to be better and competitive to earn the fame and fortune.
Also, the time they earn a lot of money isn’t as long as ordinary jobs such as an office clerk, hair stylist or bus driver because of the physical limitation.
They need to make enough money not only to pay for their effort and performance but also for their retirement.
Professional athletes deserve to make enough money for their effort and life.

18 件のコメント:

  1. I don't think professional athletes earn too mach money.
    First reason is some tipe of anti-doping system make there personal nothing.
    For example, in bicycle race, athletes have to show all of there plan to organization, and suddenly they arrived and take sample to doping chack.
    Second reason is sports is business, now.
    It's ordinary to the man who make more money earn more money than others.
    Last reason is they can't work all of there life.
    If they get older and became weak, they will fire from the team.

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    1. The MI isn't supported or explained.
      5. Verbs!!!

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  2. I don't think profesional athlets earn too money.
    There are few people who can earn a lot.
    Many athlets are difficult to survive only sports.
    Also, top players earn not only sports.
    For example, cristiano Ronaldo works as model of health products.
    About thirty percent of his salary isn't from sports.
    As a conclusion, it's difficult to survive as sport players.

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    1. An error in the MI.
      MI isn't supported or explained.
      MI and CS don't much.

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  3. I think professional athletes earn too much money.
    Their annual salaries are far higher than ordinary jobs such as government works, office works, shop clerk and so on.
    I watched some of them live a big house and have many luxury cars.
    Also, they can earn money in several ways.
    First, they could appear in a sponcer’s commercial and some variety show.
    Second, the prize money of big competitions are so big.
    So, if they left a great result, they can earn much more money.

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    1. MI is explained in the second and third sentences well.
      The second SS is also well explained.
      6. => Successful athletes can ...

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  4. I don’t think professional athletes earn too much.
    First they have to earn the money for their families.
    For them, to play the sports and earn the money is the job.
    So, to support their family the money that they earn is not high.
    Second, we should admit the effort that they had practiced so hard.
    I think their practicing time deserves the money they earned.
    For these reasons, I think money that professional athletes earned is not high.

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    1. Well organized, but not well explained.
      2, 3=> They need to earn enough money to ..
      4. Why?
      6. Do not use "I think..." to explain.

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  5. I think professional athletes earn too much money.
    Sport clubs want to get strong and famous athletes so clubs pay a lot of money to these athletes.
    If a player is famous, he or she earns a lot of money.
    Also, the athletes earn too much money when they got a good result.
    For example,If they get the first or a medal, they earn not only rewards but also broadcasting.

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    1. Well organized.
      2=> Sport clubs pay ... to get ...
      3. It is quite natural for good players to get high salaries.
      4. Why too much money???

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  6. I don't think professional athletes earn too much.
    There are many people who enjoy the sport games on TV all over the world, so athletes can make so many people happy.
    Also, they have lots of things to do in order to be a good athlete.
    In addition to practice, they have to train themselves every day and be on a restricted diet.
    They spend a lot of time for their sports.

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    1. Well organized and written.
      2=> Athletes make many people around the world enjoy watching their plays.
      5. ... time and effort to be successful/to earn money.

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  7. I think professional athletes earn too much money.
    First, they get television's work like commercial, variety shows and sport commentary shows.
    I often watch the commercial which is appeared by the soccer player.
    And I also watch the variety shows which the professional athlete who retired from the game appear on.
    Second, the famous and popular athletes get many funs.
    If they get meny funs, they became easier to succeed than they have few funs.

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    1. Examples don't support the MI.
      6. ??? It doesn't support the MI.

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  8. I don't think professional athletes earn too much money.
    First,They spend too much money to play sports as a professional.
    They have to go many places to play games but it costs several things such as
    trancrport,food expences or sport equipments.
    Also,there are a few people who can become top players.
    They are supported by many sponcers and make enoufgh money,but others are not.

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    1. Well organized and explained.
      3=> They need to spend a lot of money to ...
      4=> ... who earn a lot of money.

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  9. I think there are some differences between each sports and how strong the team.
    I like professional basketball team, but it is small team.
    Usually there are few people at home game, no TV news of them, and can not get good results in the league because they are not popuar and strong.
    But I sometimes watch soccer game on TV, there are many and many people at the stadium.
    They are strong because they offered top athlete by high salaries.
    Also, the salaries are from team's good earnings.
    The strong team can get high earnings by becoming popuar and people coming at their game.
    Strong prayers can get good salaries, and players who belongs to small and weak team can not get high salaries.

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