2018年3月14日水曜日

Writing-Sr.3-Mar.14

Reading 2  The Challenge of Running a Family Business
What do you think?  B.1
Write why you think An family in Reading-1 was successful in their business but the Bancroft family in Reading-2 had to sell their business in 100 words.

An family members committed to their business but the Bancroft people made no effort to the business.
An daughters were taught to unite to make success and they worked hard from their youth, they naturally worked together and compensated each other. They tried and worked hard for success and enjoyed working together as a family.

On the other hand, the Bankroft family members weren’t involved in the business directly, had different opinions but didn’t work or communicate each other. They just owned the business they succeeded but didn’t have passion to solve the problems or manage the business. 
(99 words)

30 件のコメント:

  1. An family communicate well, use there strength,and they can decide what they will do.
    Also, An family have a man that can manegement well.
    Finally,An's family have only three generation.
    On the other hand, Bancroft family can't decide not only in buseness but also in dinner.
    And they have two way in the family that devided between young peiple and old people, that are earn more or keep the quality.
    No one can decide whatever they need.
    And they didn't use there strength.
    Finally, They have too much generation to decide something.
    There are the reason why An's family succed and Bancroft family
    failed.

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    1. Points are well covered.
      5=> Rewrite

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    3. An family members communicate well, use there strength,and they can decide what they will do.
      Also, An family has a man that can manege well.
      Finally,An's family have only three generation.
      On the other hand, Bancroft family can't decide not only in buseness but also in dinner.
      And they are divided to young members and old members about WSJ.
      No one can decide whatever they need.
      And Bancroft family members didn't use there strength.
      Finally, They have too much generation to decide something.
      There are the reason why An's family succeed and Bancroft family
      failed.

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  2. An family was successful in their business becuse they can communicate well.
    They know other's strength, so they cooperate with their family by own strong point.
    Also they work with three generations and all have different strength.
    On the other hand, the Bancroft family do not communicate well.
    Maybe they don't know what strengs others have and also what good at themselves are.
    They can't cooperate with their family because there are no family tie for succeeding their business.
    They can't make decisions and always disagree each other because the idea of each generations are always different.

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    1. Well written.
      5=> don't use maybe to explain the reason
      6=> Rewrite

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    2. An family was successful in their business becuse they can communicate well.
      They know other's strength, so they cooperate with their family members by own strong point.
      Also they work with three generations and all have different strength.
      On the other hand, the Bancroft family do not communicate well.
      Also they don't know what strengs others have and also what good at themselves are.
      So they can't cooperate with other family members.
      They can't make decisions and always disagree each other because the idea of each generations are always different

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  3. I think An family succeeded because they worked for the same goal.
    An family had strong unity and the same enthusiasm for the business.
    They used each their talents and strengths for their business.
    They all worked with the same feeling that they wanted to succeed.
    On the other hand, the Bancroft family didn't have unity and their enthusiasm was different between generations.
    They didn't discuss in family to make important decisions, so their goal was not clear.
    This is why the Bancroft family had to sell their business.

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    1. Well explained.
      3=> Revise
      4=> Rewrite (feeeling?)

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    2. I think An family succeeded because they worked for the same goal.
      An family had strong unity and the same enthusiasm for the business.
      Each their members used each talents and strengths for their business.
      They all worked with the same passion that they wanted to succeed.
      On the other hand, the Bancroft family didn't have unity and their enthusiasm was different between generations.
      They didn't discuss in family to make important decisions, so their goal was not clear.
      This is why the Bancroft family had to sell their business.

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  4. An family had a big dream so they worked together.
    Even if they disagreed each other, they worked together to dream comes true.
    Also, they noticed about their individual strength by communication.
    They had own responsibility each other.
    On the other hand, Bancroft family did't take part in many important decisions.
    They had no responsibilty for business.
    And also, they didn't communicate well so they divided to two opinions which conflicted with younger and senior.
    That's why Bancroft family had to sell their business.

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    1. Well explained.
      2. to make ...
      3. notice->

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    2. An family members had a big dream so they worked together.
      Even if they disagreed each other, they worked together to make dream comes true.
      Also, they recognized their individual by communication.
      They had own responsibility each other.
      On the other hand, Bancroft family members didn't take part in many important decisions.
      They had no responsivility for business.
      And also, they didn't communicate well so they divided to two opinions which conflicted with younger and senior.
      That's why Bancroft family members failed in the business.

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  5. Each of Helene family had the same dreams and went to the same goal.
    They had strong family connects and unity.
    One the other hand, Bancroft family didn’t plan and prepare carefully.
    They didn’t communicate well, and not have good realtionships.
    They couldn’t manage to success.

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    1. Need to specify the objects of some of ther verbs.
      3. plan ... prepare for ...
      5. manage ... to suceed.

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    2. Helene’s family members had the same dreams and went to the same goal.
      They had strong family connects and unity.
      One the other hand, Bancroft family didn’t plan and prepare for the work carefully.
      They didn’t communicate well, and not have good realtionships.
      They couldn’t manage to succeed.

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  6. I think family members must work together not to work alone.
    Ann's family tried to have unity and made a big success.
    On the other hand,Bancroft family agued each other and separated .
    Second,communicating well can be known the person deeply.
    Ann's family know their strengh and help each other ,but Bancroft family don't talk well.
    Also,An family tried to do new things after having conversation deeply,but Bancroft family hated and argued eachother.
    For these reasons ,Family business need to be unity.

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    1. Well answered.
      4=> Rewrite
      7. ->unified

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    2. I think family members must work together not to work alone.
      An's family members tried to have unity and made a big success.
      They knew their strength and helped eachother ,and did new things after having conferences deeply.
      On the other hand,Bancroft family members agued each other and separated.
      THey had diffirent opinions ,but they didn't communicate well.
      As follow,Family business need to be unified.

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  7. I think there are two reasons why An family was successful in their business.
    One is that they worked well together. They knew and respected the different strengths of all the family’s members.
    Second,they could build a great unity and achieve financial success.
    In the other hand, Bancroft family failed their company because their relationships and atmosphere of family was bad.There were no good communication and the conflict among family. Also, they couldn’t manage their buisiness well. Therefore it’s necessary to have a strong unity and a good management.

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    1. Well organized.
      6=> Rewrite
      8=> Not needed.

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  8. I think An family was success but the Bancroft family was not seccess because An family knew the importance of strength in unity.
    An family members recognized their own different strength each other and they worked together.
    Also they managed well.
    On the other hand, Bancroft family didn’t comunicate well and didn’t respect their opinion each other.
    And they let people outside of the family manage the newspaper.
    So I think it is important to have strong family ties and good managing for the family businesses.

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    1. 1. Rewrite (success???)
      3. managed what?
      6. Not needed

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    2. I think An family was successful because they knew the importance of strength in unity.
      They recognized their own different strength each other and they worked together.
      Also they managed a business well.
      On the other hand, Bancroft family members didn’t comunicate well and didn’t respect their opinions each other.
      And they let people outside of the family manage the newspaper.

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  9. An family was successful in their business because of their unit.
    They knew other's week point and strength so they could help each other.
    Also, they had same dream and work togeather from small restrant to fulfill their goal.
    The other, Bancorft family had to sell their business.
    They didn't communicate well and wasn't good at solving problems together.
    And also they didn't have same enthusiasm and goal.
    Bacause of them, they could't united so their business wasn't success.

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    1. Well explained.
      1. unit?
      4. Rewrite

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    2. An family members were successful in their business because they united.
      They knew other's week point and strength so they could help each other.
      Also, they had same dream and work togeather from small restrant to fulfill their goal.
      On the other hand, Bancorft family members had to sell their business because they didn't respect each other.
      They didn't communicate well and wasn't good at solving problems together.
      And also they didn't have same enthusiasm and goal.
      Bacause of them, they could't united so their business wasn't success.

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  10. An family have strong unity but Bancroft do not.
    An educates her children to have strong tie for many years.
    And she makes use of their strength so that each family members have diffrent role.
    On the other hand, Bancroft family members conflict with their policy and end up selling their company.
    Other reason is that existence of founder.
    In Green Dragon, founder have still control as reader but The Wall Street Journal has no founder.
    Also, it is difficult to have same founder's enthusiasm if founder already died.
    For thease reasons, each family family business have diffrent results.

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    1. Interesting thought about the founder.
      3. Rewrite (who makes use of...?)
      4. need more explanation

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    2. An family members have strong unity so that their family business was successful.
      An daughters were taught to have strong tie so they could help and work together naturally.
      On the other hand, Bancroft family members confilicted with ther opinions and they
      couldn't communicate with each members.
      Also, they didn't have same enthusiasm as founder becouse the campany took ages.



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