2018年4月11日水曜日

Writing-Sr.3-Apr.11

What do you think? -1 => Identify the benefits and disadvantages of the new monitors for;
      Restaurant                                      
Servers                                                    
Customers                                 
Who will benefit the new digital dining technology the most? 
Write five to eight sentences in response.

TK's Revision to Kota's Writing
I think the restaurant will benefit the most.
First, customers will order more.
AI suggests things that customers may like, and sometimes customers may order extra dishes when they are given good suggestions. The digital dining technology brings more money to the restaurant.
Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
Because "digital dining" is rare and fun, customers will upload photos of their dining experience to SNS. If more customers are interested in the new technology and come to the restaurant, the sales will increase.

These are the reasons why the restaurant will benefit the most.

Model Writing
I think their customers will benefit the most from the new gadget.
SS-1  First, customers can choose the way they order their meals. With the touchscreen monitor, they can visually and easily see the entire menu with color photos without reading the descriptions or being described by a server. It’s much easier and more reliable presentation than human memory, especially for those who are not comfortable in English or less social customers. And of course, they can ask the servers for help if they want to.
SS-2 Another reason is the tip. If the customers can order via the machine, they won’t feel obligated to pay as much tip as they usually do to the server at an ordinary restaurant.
CS  The new digital dining seems to provide more freedom and less obligation to their customers. 

29 件のコメント:

  1. Restaurant benefits the most.
    First, customers order more.
    AI suggest the thing that customers may like and sometimes customers order extra things that would not ordered if AI not suggest.
    It gives the restaurant to more money.
    Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
    Because "digital dining" is rare and fun, and also, this system can upload to SNS like picture.
    If the more customers will come, the sales will be increase.
    There are the reasons why restaurant benefits the most.

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    1. Very well stuructered and reasoned, and also explained if written properly.
      2. ... more if/when ...
      3. gives=> brings
      6. ... customers will ...

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    2. Restaurant will benefit the most.
      First, customers will order more if they use this.
      Costomers usually order the menu which AI recommends, but sometimes order extra one which there isn’t on the menu.
      It brings the restaurant more money and ideas.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      As "digital dining" is rare system and exciting, many people become to know this through the SNS.
      If more customers will come, the salaly will increase.
      There are the reasons why restaurant will benefit the most.

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    3. Restaurant will benefit the most.
      First, customers order more if "digital dining" come.
      AI suggest the thing that customers may like and sometimes customers order extra things that would not order if AI not suggest.
      It brings to the restaurant more money.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      Because "digital dining" will be rare and fun, and also, this system can upload to SNSs some things like picture.
      If the more customers will come, the sales will be increase.
      There are the reasons why I thought restaurant will benefit the most.

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    4. Restaurant will benefit the most.
      First, customers will order more.
      AI suggests the thing which custmers may like and sometimes customers order extra things that AI couldn't expect.
      It gives the restaurant to more money.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      "Digital dining" is so rare and fun that people take a picture and upload about this system to SNS.
      If the more customers will come, the sales will be increase.
      These are the reasons why restaurant will benefit the most.

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    5. Restaurant will benefit the new digital dining technology the most.
      First, customers oreder more if AI becomes servers.
      AI suggest some menue that customers may like so that numbers of order will increase.
      It brings the restaurant more money.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      Digital dining is fresh and rare for customers so that this restaurant will be famous.
      If the more customers will come, the sales will be increase.
      There are the reasons why restaurant benefits the most.

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    6. Restaurant will benefit the most.
      First, customers order more when they use the digital dining technology to order.
      AI can suggest things that customers may like.
      By doing so, customers could order things that would not be ordered if AI doesn't suggest.
      It brings more money to the restaurant.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      Because digital dining is rare and fun, and this system can upload to SNS.
      The more customers will come, the more the sales will increase.
      There are the reasons why restaurant will benefit the most.

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    7. Restaurnt will benefit the most.
      First, costomers order more when the new technology is appiered.
      AI suggest that customers like and sometimes order extra things that would not ordered if AI not suggest.
      It brings the restaurrant to more money.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      The "digital dining" is rare and fun and also this system is uploaded to SNS as pictures.
      If the more customers will come, the sales will be increase.
      There are the reasons why resraurant will benefit the most.

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    8. Restaurant will benefit the most.
      First,customers will order more when they use moniters.
      AI suggests something that customers may prefer and then ,customers order more items.
      It brings the restaurant more money .
      Second,more customers will come to the restaurant .
      "degital dining" is rare and fun,and more this system can show SNS like mobile phone.
      If more customers come ,the restaurant can earn more money.
      These reasons ,restaurant will benefit the most.

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    9. Restaurant will benefit the most.
      First, customers order more if the computer program automatically suggest additional items.
      AI suggests the thing that the customer may like or seems delicious in the season, so customers tend to order extra things.
      It brings the restaurant to more money.
      Second, custermers will come to the restaurant more.
      Because ‘’digital dining’’ is rare and looks fun, and this system can upload to SNS with pictures.
      If a number of customers will come, the sales will increase.
      For these reasons, I think restaurant will benefit the most.

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    10. I think restaurant will benefit the most.
      First, customers will order more.
      AI suggests the things that customers may like and customers could order extra things that would not ordered if AI doesn’t suggest.
      It gives the restaurant more money.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      Because "digital dining" is rare and fun, and also, many people will get to know the sistem through SNS.
      If the more customers will come, the sales will increase.
      These are the reasons why restaurant will benefit the most.

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    11. Restaurant will benefits the most.
      First, customers order more if the new digital system starts.
      AI suggest the thing that customers may order and sometimes customers order something that AI doesn't suggest.
      It will bring more earninngs to the restaurant.
      Second, more customers will come to the restaurant.
      Because digital dining is rera and fun, and also, customers will upload to SNS by picture.
      If the more customers will come, the sales wil be increased.
      There are reasons why the restaurant will benefits the most.

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  2. Customors will benefit the most.
    They enjoy new technology very much.
    Recently, most people put pictures on the net.
    If there are any good net environment, it becomes well advantage.
    They don’t have to talk to servers what we order.
    Some people feel bother when talking with servers in restaurant.

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    1. Well explained.
      4. ... is ..., it provides good ...
      5. Also, ...

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  3. I think servers benefit the most.
    They can earn more money than before.
    The machine makes customers order more items by uniqe functions.
    Also,it reduces the servers budget.
    They can conentrate their work more easily and provide high quality sevices for customers.

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    1. Well organized.
      1. ... will benefit ...
      3. ... because of ...
      4. budget=>

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  4. I think customers will benefit the most by new digital dining technology.
    They will be able to order easily by only themselves at their table.
    It means, they don't need to call and wait servers to tell what they order.
    Customers can save their time at the restaurant.
    Also, it cause no trouble between servers by checking the order themselves.
    There are no stress with eating dinner at the restaurant.
    With this new technology, customers will spend fun time and make good memories.

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    1. Well explained and written.
      3. ... wait for ...
      5. Also, there will be less trouble with the servers when customers order themselves.
      6. Then, cusotmers will feel less stress ...

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  5. I think servers benefit the most.
    The amount of servers' work will decrease.
    If the new digital dining technology is used, they don't have to take customers' order, so they can work easier.
    Also, customers order quickly with digital dining, so the restaurant can serve much more customers and servers tips will increase.
    Though servers work easily, they get more money than before.
    This is a great benefit.

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    1. Well structured.
      1. ... will benefit ...
      3. Servers won't have ...with the digital dining technology.
      5. ... work less ( or more easily), they will...

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  6. I think servers will benefit the most from the new tdegital dining technology.
    First, they will earn more money than ever.
    It is showed that customer bill will be 15 to 20 percent higher by using it so servers could earn more money with tips.
    Also, they don’t have to do anything expect serve foods.
    Custmers will order themselves with the monitor.
    So servers don’t have to take customers’ orders.
    For these resons, servers benefit the most.

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    1. Well organized and written.
      4. ... except (for) serving foods and drinks.
      5, 6=> Since customers order ..., servers won't ...
      7. ... will benefit ...

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  7. I think servers will benefit the most.
    First,servers will be able to get more tips than before.
    It is so easy for customers to order that they order more dishes.
    Server gets a tip by delivering dishes.
    Also,they are not stressful.
    They decrease a lot of tasks that they have to do.
    That's why I think servers will benefit the most.

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    1. Well organized and explained.
      3. ... for customers order more dishes.
      4. ... only by delivering those dishes.
      5. Also, it is ... for ...
      6. The new digital dining technology will ...

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  8. I think Restaurant will benefit the new digital dining technology.
    First, they can get more profit by reducing the number of staffs.
    And restaurant will enable to pay more money to staffs.
    Second, restaurant can manage their stores easier becouse computar never makes mistakes how the restaurant is crowded.
    They can cut material fee, too.
    In thease reasons, restaurant earns more than anyone.

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    1. Well reasoned and explained.
      1. ... with the ...
      2. Who are "they"?
      3. Does it support 2?
      4. ... manage their business more easily ...

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  9. I think servers will benefit the new digital dining technology the most.
    First, servers could work without feeling stress and get a lot of advantages.
    Not only their tasks will be simpler, but their salary becomes higher by customers’ tips.
    Second, they don’t have to take the responsibility for computer’s errors.
    PC tends to cause trouble, and the system does not necessarily operate correctly at all time.
    There are possibilities that power outage or lightning strikes.
    But, servers won’t be blamed by customers because it’s a computer’s trouble.
    For these reasons, I think servers will benefit the most.

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    1. Well reasoned and explained.
      1. ... benefit the most with ...
      3. ... but also they will make more tip.
      4. ... for erros caused by the customers or machines.
      7. not necessary (same as 4)

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  10. I think servers will benefit the new digital dining technology the most.
    First, server earn more money.
    If costomers can order quickly , they order many items.
    Then, servers get more money in tips.
    Second, a lot of people will lose their job because of decreasing server's job.
    When new technology is implrove, costomer can do many things by themselves.
    Therfore, they work more easier than before.
    Because of these reasons, server will benefit the most.

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