2018年6月27日水曜日

Writing-Sr.3-Jun.27

What do you think?-A.2
Clarify Mad Anthony’s reasons to support his opinion in the textbook
Main Point: A throwaway society is sign that things are better and people are wealthier.
Support-1: Lower Prices – Technology lowered the costs. Smaller price difference between buying and fixing
Support-2: Increased Wealth <- More money, lower prices
Support-3: Increased Features <- Technology especially electronics. Digital camera, cell phone, GPS
Conclusion: The throwaway society shows how good things are.

=>Do you agree or disagree with Anthony’s arguments? 
Write your response in 5-8 sentences.

9 件のコメント:

  1. I agree with Anthony's arguments.
    First, buy new one is cheaper than fix the broken one now, so most people buy a new one because cheaper is better, these days.
    For example, once my PC was broken, the cost to fix was over two-humdred-thousand yen.
    But the cost to buy new one was about a half, so buy new one was cheaper than fix broken one recently.
    Second, in many cases, new one is better than old one.
    For example, PC about ten years later only have one-hundred GB HDD.
    Now, we can buy PC that has three TB(About three-thousand GB) HDD one or five-hundred GB SSD(It is clearly faster than HDD) one, so buy new one is better than fix old, badly one, now.
    In this two reasons, I agree with his arguments.

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    1. Well reasoned.
      Try different examples instead of using the same topic (PC).
      Grammar errors! A verb can't be the subject or an object of a sentence!
      #1. Write in two sentences=> clear SS.

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  2. I can't agree with his opinions that increased wealth brings to throwaway society.
    First, wealthy people tend to use high quality things becouse they lasts long time.
    There are some levels between wealth and more money doesn't lead to buy morethings.
    For example, Steave Jobs always wear same sweater not to waste time for choosing.
    Second, his sugguestion suits in developping countries and not in developped countries.
    There are so many people who use throwaway things becouse they don't aford to buy expensive things.

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    1. Well structured but not well organized.
      What is the first supporitng point, #2 or #3?
      And what is the example(#4) for?
      #2: they lasts?

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  3. I don't agree with his arguments.
    Buying new things leads to destroying the environment.
    He said people can get more things because they increased wealth, but it is so selfish.
    The more we throw away old things and buy new ones, the more nature will be destroyed.
    Also, we don't need to get the latest model.
    For example, I bought the latest smart phone and it is very convenient.
    But I came to think of it, the previous one was useful enough for me to use.

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    1. Well organized, especially the first argument.
      #4: the more nature will be destroyed=> be more specific to support why it's destroyed.
      #5=> we don't always ...
      #7: Be more specific. Just thinking doesn't support your argument.

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  4. I agree with Anthony's arguments that people would be wealthier owe to the lower prices.
    People would save more money if goods's price were low.
    For example, 100yenshop provides us low cost and also high quality goods.
    We can buy useful things there ,which sometimes not sold on the other shop.
    Some people might say high cost items is high quality but I think 100yen shop items is also high quality.
    If people buy items which is more lower cost,I think it is a wise act.

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    1. Good example to support your argument.
      Do not use "I think" to support or explain your "thoughts."
      Grammar: many many Singlar-Plural errors.

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    2. Some people might say high cost items are high quality but 100yen shop items are also high quality.
      If people buy items which are more lower cost,I think it is a wise act.

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