2017年10月7日土曜日

Eiken Writing-Sr.2-Oct.7th

Eiken 2nd Grade Writing Task
Make sure to follow the instructions.
Plan your writing using the given sheet in three minutes

Write your answer in six to ten sentences (80~100 words) in 15 minutes
Your opinion in one or two sentences
Reason-1 in two to four sentences: explain why, explanation, example
Reason-2 in two to four sentences: explain why, explanation, example
(Conclusion in one sentence: restate your opinion in a different way)
You do NOT have to use “Because” in the beginning of the sentence.
Try NOT translating from Japanese but remembering the phrases and words you’ve learned.
Key Points: how well your opinion is explained without grammar, punctuation or spelling errors.

Revise your writing in three minutes

=> Check the model writing in Eiken website (2017-1)

23 件のコメント:

  1. I think young people should start their own companies.
    There are some benefits for young people.
    First, they can do what they want to do by organizing own companies.
    It is difficult to accept young people's idea in the big companies.
    Second, it is possible to earn a lot of money.
    In fact, there are some yong people who earn a lot.
    That's why, I think starting company is a good idea for young people.

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    1. 75 words in seven sentences.
      Second point should to be explained more specifically.

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  2. I think the idea that young people are starting their own companie is good.
    First, they can decide their own job security.
    Mostly the people who started company could be a president of the company.So it's possible to decide their own job security and they can work without the stress from the job security.
    Second, they can do whatever they love without stress.If they couuldn't do they love they would be miss it.The emotion give a huge stress to workers.
    That why I think the idea is good for young people.

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    1. 94 words in eight sentences.
      Good supporting points but there are quite a few spelling and grammar errors.

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  3. I think it's a good idea that young people are starting their own companies.
    First, they can know how difficult earning money is through works.
    If they do good work, they can earn money.
    It's a good experience to success in the future.
    Also they can learn it's hard to success.
    Second, they don't need to start their own company after graduating.
    It takes a lot of time to create company by themselves after graduating.
    They need much time and many knowledge to create company.
    Staring sooner is better.

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    1. 89 words in nine sentences.
      The second point doesn't support the answer.

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  4. I think it is good for young people to start their companies.
    First, it is fun to work own companies. I can do anything what I wanted because no one tells me what to do.
    Second, I can get much money if my own company is succeed. I will get only decided money when I work in company of some one, but I can get more money if I work hard in my own company.

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    1. 75 words in seven sentences.
      "young people" should be the subject, not "I."

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  5. I do not think it is good to start own companies.
    First,income is not safer than people who work jobs at their campanies.
    If employers can not run their campanies well,their income will decrease and they can not pay money to their employees.
    Second, people who succeeded their companies are very few.
    It is very difficult to run them.
    For these reasons,we should not start running own companies.

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    1. 68 words in six sentences.
      The first point doesn't support the answer, and there are too many spelling/grammar/punctuation errors.

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  6. I think this is a good idea.
    First, young people can imagine well about their future and chance than older. So they come up new idea and think how can they do it. They can create new things by new way.
    Second, I saw the news about death by working too hard recently.
    Now, in the company, people have to work and work all day. It's a big problem.
    Young people can change and make new society by themselves.
    That' why, I think it is a good idea.

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    1. 88 words in nine sentences.
      The second point needs to be reorganized.

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  7. I don't think this is a good idea.
    We need a lot of experience when we start our own companies.
    We have to know how to do business.So,we can know it when you work in company as worker.
    Also,We need a lot of money when we start our own companies.
    So,we have to lend money.However,when the company can't earn enough money,the company was broken,Then,you can't return money and are worry about money.
    Therefore,We have to work at company at first, after that we start our own companies.

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    1. 90 words in nine sentences.
      Excellent explanation!
      The fifth and sixth sentence should be combined.

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  8. I think it is good idea to start their own companies.
    There are tow reasons.
    First, it is very exciting to be able to what they can want.
    They can dcide the jobs whatever they want.
    If they have some jobs they don't want to, they can told emplpyees do it.
    Second, people who start thier own companies is free.
    They don't have to order to someone so they don't have any stress by seniors.
    Because of tow reasons I agree that they make their own companies.

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    1. 87 words in eight sentences.
      Pay attention to grammar and spelling.

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  9. I think it's a good idea that young people start their own companies.
    First, ideas young people creat are more creative and interesting.
    So, a lot of company which is exacting and useful for people will be made.
    And, society will be good.
    Second, It is difficult to start a new company, but they experience that by young, it's a good time to grow up

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    1. 65 words in five sentences.
      The 4th sentence needs to be explained.

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  10. Answer: I think it’s a great idea for young people to start their own companies.
    Reason-1: First, they can work with responsibility.
    In order to start and run a company, the person must be good at managing business and people.
    No matter what the person decides to do, he or she must be responsible for all the decisions.
    Such experience is hardly obtained if they work for someone else’s company.
    Reason-2: Also, they learn a lot by running their own business.
    If they make a success, they can expand the business.
    Even if they make a mistake, they can learn from it for the future.
    (Conclusion: There is no doubt that starting a own company is good for young people.)

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  11. I think starting own company is a good idea.
    I have two reasons why I think so.
    First, they can challenge anything that they are interested in.
    If they work for someone, they have to work only the thing that is told by boss and it makes them boared.
    But if they run a company, they can do something interested in without following the order.
    Second, they can take a vacation whenever they like.
    They can do something fun when they get tired or boared with the work.
    So they can continue to work with no stress.
    For these reasons, I think it is a good idea to start own company.

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    1. 111 words in nine sentences.
      Excellent explanation.
      The second and the last sentences aren't needed.

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  12. It's a good idea that young people start own companies.
    First, to start own company can try myself.
    To try myself is good for my experience to become an excellent adult.
    Also, the salary is good.
    If I were a president, I could get wonderful salary,
    I want to control the money myself to become a rich.
    This two reasons why I think it is a good idea.

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    1. 68 words in seven sentences.
      Use "young people" as the subject, not "I."

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