2018年2月21日水曜日

Write your Opinion-Sr.3-Feb.21

Some people think it is a good idea for children to compete in team sports.
Others believe it is a bad idea. 
What do you think? Is it good or bad for children to play on sports teams?

Plan: Complete the graphic organizer in page 79 with your reasons and supporting details.

=>Write a paragraph about your opinion in response to the question. 
Support your opinions with reasons and examples.  
Make sure to introduce your opinions with appropriate phrases.
End your paragraph with a strong concluding sentence. 


Sample Keywords
- Team Member=> work with others: communicate with others, help each other

- Team Work=> work as team: plan/practice/perform for a shared goal, team spirit

31 件のコメント:

  1. I think it's not a good idea.
    One reason is sport team spend too much time.
    Children have to do many thing, like make friends, read books, and study.
    But after the practice of it, almost of the members can't do anything.
    For example, a friend of mine came home after 9 P.M. after the practice.
    So he always said to me that he can't study enough.
    The other reason is they didn't play sport to be fun in the team.
    They play to win, it's not bad.
    But somebodys throw fun to win, that's the thing I think bad.
    And players have to compete in the team, so some players maybe sometimes forget respect and became rude.
    There are the reason why I think the idea is bad.

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    1. Well supported but too many singular/plural and other grammar errors.
      3,4. Correct all the errors and rewrite.
      9. Rewrite

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    2. I think it's not a good idea.
      One reason is sport team spend too much time.
      Child has to do many things, for example, make friend, read book, and study.
      But after the practice, almost of the members can't do anything due to it's too late.
      For example, a friend of mine came home after 9 P.M. after the practice.
      So he always said to me that he can't study enough.
      The other reason is they didn't play sport to be fun in the team.
      They play to win, it's not bad.
      But somebodys throw feeling fun to win, that's one of the reason why I think it's bad for children to play on sports teams.
      And players have to compete in the team, so some players maybe sometimes forget respect and became rude.
      There are the reason why I think the idea is bad.

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  2. I think it is good for children to play on sports team.
    First,They can compete their team members to attend games.
    For example,baseball is limited the number of people who can attend.
    They practice harder to improve their skill.
    Second, they can make friends and help each other.
    Playing sport together makes a strong relationship.
    For these reasons,children should play team sports.

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    1. Well organized and written, but the first SS is not supported clearly.
      2. compete their team members??? attend games???
      3, 4=> don't support the SS

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    2. I think it is good for children to play on sports team.
      First,children learn thay team sport is fun.
      They have to create a strategy to win games and they feel that thinking about it is interesting.
      Second, they can make friends and help each other.
      Playing sport together makes a strong relationship.
      For these reasons, children should play team sports.

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  3. I think it's good for children to play on sports teams.
    Childrens learn about importance of work with others.
    If we cooperate with someone, we can do anything.
    And also, they need to communicate with team members.
    Recentry, many childrens lack of communication skill because they often play alone like playing video games.
    For these reasons, I believe that children have to play on sports team.

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    1. Well organized and supported, need more clarification for the 2nd SS.
      3. ... with others, ...
      4. ... in a sport team.
      5. ... lack communication skill ...
      Add another sentence to further support the SS.

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    2. I think it's good for children to play on sports teams.
      Children learn about how importance of working with others.
      If we cooperate with others, we can do anything.
      And also, they need to communicate in a sports team.
      Recentry, many children lack communication skill because they often play alone like playing video games.
      To play video games don't need to talk to others and it will cause communication problems.
      For these reasons, I believe that children have to play on sports team.

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  4. I agree to children playng on sport teams.
    First, they are able to learn how friendship is important to lead the team to victory.
    In my case, I thought that to be cheered by teammates makes me relax when I did a mistake during the soccer game.
    Second, it is good health for children to do team sports.
    Teams sports is easily continue than solo sports becouse of teammates.
    For thease reasons, participating in team sports has good effect on children.

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    1. Well written but the first SD doesn't support the SS.
      1. ... that children ...
      2. can learn how important ...
      3. Doesn't support the SS. Rewrite

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    2. I agree that playing on sort teams is good for children.
      First, they can learn how friendship is important to lead the team to victory.
      In team sports, it is imposibble to win without teammates so they need to guess how they think and what do they want to do.

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  5. I think it’s important for children to compete in team sports.
    First, they can get patient.
    If they want to win the game, they practice a lot and keep trying.
    They can know disappointing when they lose.
    Second, they communicate with team mates in necessity.
    They have to make strategies and sometimes encourage team mates.
    These are treasures for their lives, that’s why competing is important.

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    1. Well structured but the first SS isn't supported clearly.
      2. they learn the importance of patience.
      3, 4 don't support 2. => team sports, not any sports.
      7. These are important qualities for their lives.
      8. These are the reasons why ...

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    2. 2 First, they learn the importance of patience.
      3 They get the motivation through playing sports as a member of the team.
      7 There are important qualities for their lives.
      8 There are the reasons why competing is impartant.

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  6. I think it is a god idea for children to compete in team sport.
    First they learn importance of working togther to achieve the same goal.
    They will be highly motivated and enjoy playing by cooperating together.
    When they achieve their goal, they can share joy.
    Also they can compete each other in the team.
    In team sports, they can’t play in the game unless they get a position.
    To get a position, they practice hard and they become stronger.
    For these reasons, I think children should play team sports.

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    1. Very well organized and written.
      3. ... playing the sports by cooperating with each other.
      6. ... not all the team members take part in the game.
      7. Rewrite

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  7. I think it is a good idea for children to compete in team sports.
    First, children can know how cooperate with others is importnt through team sports.
    Everyone want to win, but they can't win by only themselves.
    So they learn how to cooperate and try to get win by the team.
    Also, they will be a person who can think other people's feelings.
    To know what other think is important for team cooperation.
    By thinking other's feeling, they will be a kind person.
    For these reasons, I think it is a good idea.

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    1. Very well organized and supported.
      2. learn, not know.
      ... how important it is to ... in team sports.
      3. ... wants .... only by themselves.
      4. They learn how to cooperate with eath other to win games.

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    2. 2 First, children can learn how imporant it is to cooperate in team sports.
      3 Everyone wants to win, but they can't win only by themselves.
      4 They learn how to cooperate with each other to win games.

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  8. I think it’s a good idea for children to compete in team sports.
    First, they could grow up in several aspects.
    It’s difficult to play sports with others compare to individual sport, because the player can’t do his plan what he considers. So, it could have clash but they’ll grow up after overcome the difficulty.
    Second, the ability of cooperation is useful when they become adult.
    It’s important to listen and accept other’s view in team sports.
    And, it’s important too when growing up.
    For these reasons, It’s good for children to do sports in teams.

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    1. Well organized but not unclear why you think so.
      2. several aspects<= need to be explained or shown examples.
      3,4. ??? Try not to translate from Japanese. Rewrite, but without because and so.

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    2. First, they could grow up in several aspects such as mental and conveying own feelings.
      It’s necessary for all members to have the same motivation and goal. Sometimes they may clash because of the differences of thinking, but if they overcome this difficulty, they could step up.
      Second, the ability of cooperation is useful when they become adult.
      It’s important to listen and accept others’ view in team and, it’ important too when they grow.

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  9. I think it is good for children to play on sports teams.
    First, they can improve their sports skills.
    They teach their weak points each other and overcome them.
    They can find the fault which they cant find by themselves.
    Second, they can acquire ability of communication.
    They naturally learn good communication during the game.
    For these reasons, I think it is good idea to compete in team sports.

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    1. Well organized and explained.
      2. ... in team sports.
      4. => Everyone has a weak pointthat they ...
      5. acquire=> develop an ability to...
      6. ... learn to communicate while/as they ...

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    2. I think it is good for children to play on sports teams.
      First, they can improve their sports skills in team sports.
      They teach their weak points each other and overcome them.
      Everyone has a weak point that they can't find by themselves.
      Second, they can develop an ability of communication.
      They naturally learn to communicate while they play sports.
      For these reasons, I think it is good idea to compete in team sports.

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  10. I think it is good for children to play on sports team.
    First, they learn how to deal with their teammate.
    They are taught what is good and bad and importance of teamwork by their teammate.
    Second, they learn importance of making efforts.
    They know if they try them best, they can succeed easier.
    If they can succeed, they become happy and keep making efforts.
    To play sports makes children's mental strengh.

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    1. Well organized and written, but the second SS isn't supported clearly.
      5. 6<= yes for any sports, not necessarily team sports.
      Rewrite to support the second SS, sentence 4.

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    3. Second, they develop skill easier than individual sports.
      They can lern from their friends to see them.
      If they can't do anything, they cover each other's week point.
      For these reasons, I think it is good idea.

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