China’s
traditional lifestyle is changing because young people who live in farms want
to work in a city.
They find
via TV that physically easier and financially more rewarding jobs are available
in cities that are promoted by the government.
Many of such
young people move to cities to work in factories, produce
competitive products in the world and help grow the local economy.
In the past, most Chinese people were farmers, but recently, a lot of young people are moving to the cities. Young Chinese people found that the jobs in the cities can earn more money than farming through Television. Now, Chinese economy is growing rapidly and the government expects that more and more people will be living in the cities.
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In the past, most Chinese people were farmers, but recently, a lot of young people are moving to the cities. Young Chinese people found that they can earn more money in the cities than farming through Television. Now, Chinese economy is growing rapidly and the government ecpects that more and more people will be living in the cities.
削除The traditional way of life in China is changing from farming to working in a city. Television, money and the economic goals of the government were main factor that young adults to the cities.
返信削除Workers in factory earn more money than farmers do and many people assist with their growing business to get modern industrial way of life.
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Television, money and the economic goals of the government made young poeple know city's life and decide to move there.
削除Recently,a traditional way of life in Chaina is changing.
返信削除Television, money and Chinese government’s will drew young adults to the cities.
Factories hire new workers with low paying, so that Chinese economy was growing soon.
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#3 was growing soon.
Telenision, money and Chinese government’s thought drew young adults to the cities.
削除Factories hire new workers with low paying, so that Chinese economy grow fast.
Traditional way of life in China was farming, but the chinese traditional way of life is changing because young adults want to leave the farms.
返信削除Farming provide enough food, but it doesn't provide enough money, so government would help these people.
change from traditional way to modern way.
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Chinese traditional way of life was farming, but it is changing because young adults want to leave the farms.
削除Farming provide enough food, but it doesn't provide enough money, so the government helps these people.
So china is changing from traditional way to modern way.
In China, most people become farmers or farmer's wife effects on traditional lifestyle.
返信削除Recently, many young adults go to city to earn more money because city jobs are kindness for their body and they want to spend money to buy some modern things.
Chinese factories grow up produce productions to empyee many people.
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#3 grow up produce productions to empyee many people=>
Recently, young people earn money at city because city jobs are easy to work their body.
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返信削除Most chinese people were farmers until recently and it was the traditional was of the life,but the lifestyle in changing because they wanted to work in city.
Young people
Many young people were move to city to eran mony easier and buy morden things and the chinese goverment helped it.
As the chinese economy was develping,wokers were hired for the growing cities and china become one of a changing nation.
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Fermers were chinese traditional life style,but it was changing.
削除China is changing the traditional way of life to the modron idustrial way of life.
返信削除Tree factors, televisio, money and the economic goals of the government, interest young people to move to the city.
In the future, Working in the city is the modron industrial way of life because workers move to the city to earned more money.
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Traditional way of life is changing to the modern industrial way of life in China.
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