I think the project in Vancouver is effective. Planting trees and makes city more botanical provide people with relax and the cleaner air. The residents in the city can get those benefits. Also, locating bike lanes are useful for residents and tourists. They can enjoy cycling in nature and it helps lessen the amount of CO2 instead of using cars or buses. Vancouver sets a clear goals and practice to achieve them.
72 words. Well explained. Quite a few grammatical and punctuation errors. #1 the most … #2 => Planting trees makes … and provides … #3 => … can enjoy … #4 are=> useful=> #5 lesson=> reduce instead of …<= unnecessary. #6 a clear goals=> practice to=>
I think the green project in Singapore is the most effective. It is possible to achieve urbanization and environmental protection by making park areas. It not only improves the environment but also leads to economic growth by increasing the number of tourists who visit for green tourism. Also, many greens in a busy city makes people feel relaxed and reduces stress. When people get tired of work, they can walk in a natural area near the office, so it give them mental and emotional rest.
85 words. Well explained. Check the verb forms. #2 It is possible …=> It helps ... #3 who … => who seeks for … #4 many greens … makes=> #5 …, so it give …=> …, where they can …
I think the green project in Singapore is the most impressive. First, I was surprised that all new buildings must include plants. Because of this law, the whole city becomes good for the environment. Second, Singapore is a small and crowded city, but it uses tall buildings and rooftops to create green space. This unique idea allows the city to add more plants. For these reasons, Singapore’s green project is very effective.
72 words. Add a little more explanation or an example (SD). Do not break the line after each sentence. #2 I was surprised …<= This doesn’t support the TS #3 … good for the environment=>
Shizuka 年を越えてしまいすみませんでした。 I think the green project in Cairo is the most impressive. There are two positive effects by building the park. First, by removing the very wide trash dump to build the park, soil pollution has been prevented. There is a danger that harmful substances could leak out from the trash. The second effect is that the park became a new source of income. People visit various facilities in the park, so it makes Cairo a more attractive city.
78 words. Very good points. #2 by building … => to build… #3 very wide=> a huge amount of prevented=> resolved. #4 There is => It was dangerous if … #5 … income => … to the city. #6 People …, so it makes …=> The park now attracts …
I think the green project in Cairo is the most impressive. There are two positive effects to building the park. First, by removing a huge amount of trash to build the park, soil pollution was resolved. It was dangerous if harmful substances leaked out from the trash. The second effect is that the park became a new source of income to the city. The park now attracts people to its various facilities, making Cairo a more attractive city.
Akinari I think the green project in Singapore is the most effective. The government requires all new buildings to have some plants. So, plants will naturally spread over time. Also, gardens can be a sightseeing spot just like "supertrees". Plants are not only environmentally friendly but also become a tourism resource.
I think the green project in Singapore is the most effective. As all new buildings are required to have some plants, more plants will naturally spread over time. Some parks became sightseeing spots after making artificial unique trees such as "supertrees". Like this case, gardens or parks can be a sightseeing spot just by planting unique plants. Trees and plants are not only environmentally friendly but also become a tourism resource.
I think the project in Vancouver is effective. Planting trees and makes city more botanical provide people with relax and the cleaner air. The residents in the city can get those benefits. Also, locating bike lanes are useful for residents and tourists. They can enjoy cycling in nature and it helps lessen the amount of CO2 instead of using cars or buses. Vancouver sets a clear goals and practice to achieve them.
返信削除72 words. Well explained. Quite a few grammatical and punctuation errors.
削除#1 the most … #2 => Planting trees makes … and provides …
#3 => … can enjoy … #4 are=> useful=>
#5 lesson=> reduce instead of …<= unnecessary.
#6 a clear goals=> practice to=>
I think the green project in Singapore is the most effective. It is possible to achieve urbanization and environmental protection by making park areas. It not only improves the environment but also leads to economic growth by increasing the number of tourists who visit for green tourism. Also, many greens in a busy city makes people feel relaxed and reduces stress. When people get tired of work, they can walk in a natural area near the office, so it give them mental and emotional rest.
返信削除85 words. Well explained. Check the verb forms.
削除#2 It is possible …=> It helps ...
#3 who … => who seeks for …
#4 many greens … makes=>
#5 …, so it give …=> …, where they can …
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削除I think the green project in Singapore is the most impressive.
返信削除First, I was surprised that all new buildings must include plants.
Because of this law, the whole city becomes good for the environment.
Second, Singapore is a small and crowded city, but it uses tall buildings and rooftops to create green space.
This unique idea allows the city to add more plants.
For these reasons, Singapore’s green project is very effective.
72 words. Add a little more explanation or an example (SD). Do not break the line after each sentence.
削除#2 I was surprised …<= This doesn’t support the TS
#3 … good for the environment=>
Shizuka
返信削除年を越えてしまいすみませんでした。
I think the green project in Cairo is the most impressive. There are two positive effects by building the park. First, by removing the very wide trash dump to build the park, soil pollution has been prevented. There is a danger that harmful substances could leak out from the trash. The second effect is that the park became a new source of income. People visit various facilities in the park, so it makes Cairo a more attractive city.
78 words. Very good points.
削除#2 by building … => to build…
#3 very wide=> a huge amount of prevented=> resolved.
#4 There is => It was dangerous if …
#5 … income => … to the city.
#6 People …, so it makes …=> The park now attracts …
I think the green project in Cairo is the most impressive. There are two positive effects to building the park. First, by removing a huge amount of trash to build the park, soil pollution was resolved. It was dangerous if harmful substances leaked out from the trash. The second effect is that the park became a new source of income to the city. The park now attracts people to its various facilities, making Cairo a more attractive city.
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返信削除I think the green project in Singapore is the most effective. The government requires all new buildings to have some plants. So, plants will naturally spread over time. Also, gardens can be a sightseeing spot just like "supertrees". Plants are not only environmentally friendly but also become a tourism resource.
50 words. Well written.
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#4 what gardens? Add another sentence to explain more about #4.
#5 what plants?
I think the green project in Singapore is the most effective. As all new buildings are required to have some plants, more plants will naturally spread over time. Some parks became sightseeing spots after making artificial unique trees such as "supertrees". Like this case, gardens or parks can be a sightseeing spot just by planting unique plants. Trees and plants are not only environmentally friendly but also become a tourism resource.
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