Write a paragraph
to state which activity is more dangerous than the other.
Give facts
and examples to support your opinion.
Examples of comparative activities
skiing or snowboarding, mountain climbing or
open water swimming, hunting or fishing, diving or
sailing, karate or judo, driving a car or riding a motorcycle, smoking or
drinking, eating too much or too little, living alone or
studying abroad, traveling to Africa or living in Africa, night walking
in a park or graveyard
Use
these questions to plan your writing.
1. What two things are you comparing?
2.
Do you do these activities? How often?
3. What is dangerous about the first
activity?
4.
What is dangerous about the second activity?
5. Which is more dangerous?
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Transition
words (On the contrary, but, however, nevertheless, in spite of, in contrast,
yet, on one hand, on the other hand, rather, or, nor, at the same time, while
this may be true.),
Comparative-Adjectives/Adverbs
I'm comparing eating too much and eating too little.
返信削除When we eat too much,we become fat.It causes some disease.
On the other hand,when we eat too little,we don't have enogh energy to work.In the worth situation,we starve to death.However,I think eating too much is more dangerous than eathing too little.Human could't eat too much when human was born.So,we can live for long time when we eat too little.Also,we notice that we eat too little because we can feel hungry.However,when we get some disease,we notice that we eat too much.It is too late to correct the diet.So,I think eating too much is more dangerous.
Very well explained, but TS, which activity is more dangerous, needs be stated first.
削除2. => It could cause ...
5. TS=> should be 1.
7. ?
I'm comparing about bungee jumping or skydiving.
返信削除I've never done both activities.
Both activities has similar points.
Bungee jumping and skydiving usually fall down the high point. We are frightening the height.
And also,there has a lifeline.
On the other hand, the opposite is bungee jumping usually fall down the bridge. However, skydiving fall down the air.
Both activities are important the lifeline.If the rope is cut,we would die.
Skydiving is more dangerous for me. Because, The height is too high to look the ground.
TS, which activity is more dangerous, needs be stated first.
削除Pay attention to grammar.
1. should be TS
2. => Neither activity has
5. ???
6. there has <=???
8. important the lifeline <=???
I think Kendo is more dangerous than Judo.
返信削除At first,kendo uses bamboo sword.
There is some people who lose eyesight becouse of the bamboo scrap.
And also, the sword is hard.
We use protective gear when we play.
However,it doesn't protect all of body.
For example,Kote ought to protect arm,but it can't cover with all parts.
When we receive miss shot on uncorrect parts,it pains a lot.
I've had received miss shot on rib many times.
Dou is difficult skill,so some people did mistakes.
Kendo has many difficult skills.
Tuki is one of them.
We should care about this skills.
It is very dangerous becouse the aim is throat.
We can't use this shot untill we become highschool student.
However,I recieved this shot from adults.
In thease reasons,Kendo is more dangeous.
Too much unnecessary explanation.
削除3. is some people?
7. ... it doesn't cover the entire arm.
8. => Such unprotected part is often hit by mistake.
9, 10, 11=> not needded.
12=> Tsuki is another example
13. not needed
15. It is too dangerous that junior players are not allowed to ...
16. not needed
I am comparing baseball and soccer.
返信削除Baseball is dangerous when they steal base.
When they steal base, a person who is tryng to steal and a person who is tryting to stop the steal are collided.
And also it is dangerous when the ball that was hit hits playeres, espacially pitcher.
On the other hand,soccer is dangerous because they play rough on purpose.
Some players make the opponent playeres fall down on purpose.
Other playeres bite the opponent playeres not to score the goal.
For these reason, soccer is more dangerous than baseball.
TS, which activity is more dangerous, needs be stated first.
削除2. who are "they"?
3. => When a runner tries to steal a base, he could ...
4. => the ball hit by a batter hits a player of the opponent team
6. fall dow=> push down
7. bite???