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Crowdfunding is the practice of funding a project or venture by raising monetary contributions from a large number of people, today often performed via internet-mediated registries. Crowdfunding is a form of alternative finance, which has emerged outside of the traditional financial system.
The crowdfunding model is based on three types of actors: the project initiator who proposes the idea and/or project to be funded; individuals or groups who support the idea; and a moderating organization that brings the parties together to launch the idea. Source: Wikipedia
A *pristine beach in New Zealand bought through a crowdfunding campaign has been handed to its new owners - the public. Nearly 40,000 people donated almost NZ$2.3m (US$1.7m) to buy the Awaroa beach in the Abel Tasman National Park, on the South Island. *pristine: original and pure; not spoiled
The seven-hectare site will now be run by a national park. The (1) owner, businessman Michael Spackman, agreed to sell the beach after the online crowdfunding campaign reached its target in a little more than three weeks. The purchase ensured the beach will (2) out of private hands. "It's a great day," campaigner Duane Major told the BBC. "Sometimes you can feel powerless, so for us, it's been a marvellous experience of empowerment. "There's been a real feeling of coming together. People in other countries have recognised what it's been all about too. "We're in an age with various forms of technology that can pull people apart. But in this case it brought people (3) ."
New Zealand's government made a small contribution to the crowdfunding campaign, which Mr Major said was started because of "gut instinct". But another offer to contribute by a prominent businessman and philanthropist, who said he would make up any shortfall in exchange for exclusive access to part of the beach for his family, was (4) . The campaign also negotiated with local Maori groups, who had argued the beach should be handed over to them. Mr Major said the Maori community would be (5) in the future of the land.
Q-1 Write a suitable word in (1) ~ (5)
Q-2 The population of New Zealand is about 4.5million. What do you think of getting donations from 40,000 people in just three weeks? Write your answer in three sentences.
Q1 5:2, 4:1, 3:4,
2:2, 1:2, 0:7 (18 students)
(2)vi (4)(5)
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Q2 Time allocation! Explain the answer (#1) in #2, #3!
Allocate
the time.
Answer the Qs you understand well first.
Pay attention to the part of
speech and context/collocation.
Try using the number: 40,000 vs.4.5mil or NZ$2.3mill
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4.denied
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I think getting donations from 40,000 people out of 4.5 million people in just three weeks is very fast.
The reason is, this crowdfunding is for the individual and other people won't have benefit and also, they are negotiated about nature which has to be belonged by everyone.
This is why i think this is very fast and this crowdfunding is wrong.
Q-1: 2/5 Q-2: 62 words. Not well explained.
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#3 unnecessary.
1. beach
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I think it's great that 40,000 people donated for the beach in just three weeks.
Trust is neccesary to have great support of people through the big project.
And I felt that it took a long time and a wide relationships to gain that trust.
Q-1: 0/5 Q-2: 45 words. Not well explained.
削除#2 Yes, but it doesn’t explain or support #1
#3 You need to explain why it’s great.
former
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I think it’s not so difficult. It means if one in a hundred donated, the project will be achieved. I think there are many people who are interested in owning private beach.
Q-1: 3/5 Q-2: 32 words. Not well explained.
削除#1 … to …
#2 If one in every hundred people …, they can get donation from 40,000 in NZ.
#3 owning??? Do not use “I think” to explain what you think.
Awaroa beach
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traffic
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I think it was a pretty small number and short period.
I think the number of participants increased if they had to extend the period.
It doesn’t seem to have a big impact because there are few people who can use this survive.
Q-1: 1/5 Q-2: 43 words. Not well explained.
削除#1 … number because the time was too short
#2 The number of participants could be larger if …
#3 Also, it could have brought a bigger impact on …
public
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I think 40,000 people is a huge number.
Maybe they aren’t only New Zealand people but also people in other countries.
Their efforts to cooperate with New Zealand people is great!
Q-1: 0/5 Q-2: 31 words. Not well explained.
削除#1 40,000 is a … for NZ whose population is …
#2 Why can you say that?
#3 Need to explain why it’s a huge number.
1 1beach 2get 3 attract 4 5 change
返信削除I think the Awara beach attracts people in the New Zealand. That reason, if there were sea nearby they would want to live there. So the New Zealand population has increased.
Q-1: 0/5 Q-2: 31 words. Not well explained.
削除#1 Answer the question.
#2 That reason? Who are they?
#3 ???
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I think it is very fast. They donated NZ$57.5 per person on average.
Q-1: 0/5 Q-2: 13 words.
削除#2 Good to use a number but you can't use a calculator during an exam.
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Q-1: 2/5
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I think getting donations in three weeks is not a problem .
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