=> Write to retell the incident in the present tense in six sentences.
Use time words effectively.
Par.1-3:
Situation
After a rich couple left home to see a play, a burglar intrudes/enters the house knowing that
they won’t come home for a while.
After a rich couple left home to see a play, a burglar intrudes/enters the house knowing that
they won’t come home for a while.
Par.4-5 The thief
As soon as he finds the couple unexpectedly comes home (to pick up the tickets they left),
the burglar quickly steals jewelry from the safe and runs off.
As soon as he finds the couple unexpectedly comes home (to pick up the tickets they left),
the burglar quickly steals jewelry from the safe and runs off.
Par.6 The detective
The detective from the police finds it strange that only the jewelry was stolen
but there are no other signs of theft.
The detective from the police finds it strange that only the jewelry was stolen
but there are no other signs of theft.
Par.7-10 CSI
The crime scene investigation team collects a few pieces of evidence in the crime scene,
analyzes them, and finds that they match or belong to the servant of the home.
The crime scene investigation team collects a few pieces of evidence in the crime scene,
analyzes them, and finds that they match or belong to the servant of the home.
Par.11 Confession
When arrested, the servant confesses that his employer planned and had him steal the jewelry,
and the millionaire admits he did so to get money from an insurance claim.
When arrested, the servant confesses that his employer planned and had him steal the jewelry,
and the millionaire admits he did so to get money from an insurance claim.
Par.12 Sentence
Both the servant and the rich man are convicted of the crime
and (are) sentenced to years in prison.
and (are) sentenced to years in prison.
In the evening, Millionaires Eduard and his wife Susan are at a theater to see a play but they realize that they forgot to bring the tickets.
返信削除While they are at the theater, a thief steel their possessions such as jewelries and when Susan return home, she calls police.
Right after, detective and CSI arrive to start investigations.
They find the servant’s fingerprint in the house.
The next day, the detective drove to the servant’s house to arrest him.
At a court trial later, the servant says he wanted some money, so the judges find him guilty and sentence to five years in prison.
#3, 4<= Combine
削除#5 drives
#6 The servant confesses ... and he was ...
It is 7:30 and millionaires go for a theater and a tall man is wathing them drive off.
返信削除After Eduard and Susan leave, a thief start to go inside their house and find that it's logical the thief knew the house.
Minutes later, the detective arrive at the mansion and they search the house and they found the window open.
The CSIs find a trash bin the detective found a grass-stained sshirt with a button missing and the servant was arrested.
The ervant confesses to the crime.
At a court trail, the servant was sentenced to five years in prison and Eduard was sentenced to prison for his role in the crime.
#2 it's not right.
削除#2 he escapes/leaves ...
削除#3 ... arrives ... and searches....
#4 Write just what CSI did/found
#5 ... is ...
#1. What this couple do before leave their house.
返信削除#2. What the thief does to get into the house.
#3. What the thief knows and does to get jewelry..
#4. The couples go back to home and call the police.
#5. What the thief does after heard the voices.
#6. What he police find out.
#7. The police think that the thief knows so much about this house, and what they ask to the couple.
#8. The police find for the evidence
#9. The detective find other evidence
#10. What the subsequent test shows
#11. Why the thief deprive the jewelry.
You need to group them into five or six events.
削除Millionaire Eduard Arellano and his wife Susan go to the theater, and a man goes into their room and opens a safe.
返信削除He leaves the room to run away as soon as he notices that they return to the room.
The police detective that Susan called asks them about the situation to understand it.
The CSIs searche for evidence both inside and outside of the room and find fingerprints.
The man makes the crime because he needs money with Mr. Arellano's support.
The man and Mr. Arellano goes to the prison for five years
#3 The detective finds ...
削除#5 ... confesses that he was told ... by